I swore I loved you at three in the morning over too rum and coke

[i.might.be.a.bit.sad]

I really like how you describe heartbreak without sounding too cliche and generic. However, some lines where you refer to the other person directly "you, your name" is the only part where i start to lose the original connection and start to feel like im reading a cliche. I might try rewriting it as "their name" or "them" as it makes it extremely relatable to everyone.