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[rayheinrich]

good train of thought piece, i've noticed that you use it quite a bit [in some of your poetry].
the ellipse is as clear as your sense of humour which can be scathing though i critique the person not just the poetry.
what i like about this one is the fact i have to return to the line above to reinforce the line i read at the moment. i meanthis in a good way, it acts as a sort of unwritten refrain.

i read this out loud and it worked pretty well, i had to up the tempo a little as though i were rudhing the lines out with a pause after each one [the way a child rushes his lines of speech out] and enjoyed the doing of it. i wasn't quite sure how to pronounce the ellipse,

One way is to say "dot, dot, dot".
(Though this works a lot better with Dragon-Speak* than it does with poetry.)


*A common nick-name for Dragon NaturallySpeaking speech recognition software.