04-24-2015, 04:05 PM
good train of thought piece, i've noticed that you use it quite a bit [in some of your poetry].
the ellipse is as clear as your sense of humour which can be scathing though i critique the person not just the poetry.
what i like about this one is the fact i have to return to the line above to reinforce the line i read at the moment. i meanthis in a good way, it acts as a sort of unwritten refrain.
i read this out loud and it worked pretty well, i had to up the tempo a little as though i were rudhing the lines out with a pause after each one [the way a child rushes his lines of speech out] and enjoyed the doing of it. i wasn't quite sure how to pronounce the ellipse,
the ellipse is as clear as your sense of humour which can be scathing though i critique the person not just the poetry.
what i like about this one is the fact i have to return to the line above to reinforce the line i read at the moment. i meanthis in a good way, it acts as a sort of unwritten refrain.
i read this out loud and it worked pretty well, i had to up the tempo a little as though i were rudhing the lines out with a pause after each one [the way a child rushes his lines of speech out] and enjoyed the doing of it. i wasn't quite sure how to pronounce the ellipse,