Accommodations

[cidermaid]

just a few thoughts to offer for your consideration.

                                       Accommodations

 
 
 
There are no shadows, I'm sitting in the soft light,
waiting for my doctor to come.
Just one. All by himself, he comes in,   I find this line distracting.  Just one feels unnessasary (also the repeat of one a few lines down is then diluted).    Think it could be simplified down perhaps to He comes in by himself.
like I'm not important and he's not afraid
or anything. I could be anyone
or no one.
And he'll just come in and ask a few questions  Not decided if I like the repitition of come in.  He'lljust come and ask a few questions
and look me over, make a new appointment
for a follow-up exam.
But if I was a prisoner, or had some strange rash,
he might take caution, even smile a canned smile,
not real or fake.
Some really strange rash,
something scary:
even experts don't know everything
and have waited their whole lives for this not to happen,
but are excited and tell their friends.   the last three lines really make this whole poem work for me.  Nice.

All the best AJ.