The Party

[scarlettehale]

The anaphora, or repetition of the "In line" line looses its effect toward the end. The idea of having a repetitious end line to each stanza is really interesting and can be successful. Consider the strength of that repeated line on its own. Currently "in line" is not very powerful. A lot of your other lines are more powerful and emotive than the one you are repeating six times.  

The Party

With dead heart and high hopes,
he stalks into the wild.
Flanked by fake friends,
the wolf falls,
in line.

Clarity clouds him,The repetion of the two C's are nice, but I dont understand what you mean by clarity clouds
keeps contemplations, [at bay]
at bay. Second guesses [are hilarious]
are hilarious,
in line.

Glassy amber in red,
white lines on glass,
green dressed in white.
drink, snort, smoke,
in line.

He considers,
he feels and stares.theres are pretty simple actions that could be interpretted in multiple ways. Try to claify what or how the character is feeling/staring.
Cutting deals with her emotion,
he takes meat in his fangs,this is a strong line
in line.

He drags his prey,
she stumbles along as well.is she not his prey?
Having had his fill,
he dumps her, barebones,
in line.

He returns from the hunt,
howling with pride,
but he's no wolf.
Just another sheep,this is interesting. I could see you developing this switch in characterization.
in line.

Your use of the wolf and sheep as one huge metaphor is definitely working!