04-16-2015, 01:26 AM
I had no idea what "dicky-bowed" meant, but its placement in the sentence suggested it was a descriptive verb like 'swaggered'. Even after the explanation, I'm still not sure...some kind of bow-tie? Thing is, the poem is stunning, even with an incomprehensible first line..
I had no problem with how the lights went out, streetlights burn out in real life all the time, and sometimes do glow brighter for a second before they go out. I don't think you should tinker with this poem much, other than to find another word to describe the lights to open the poem.
I teared up reading it; it moved me the same way that the last part of Tennyson's 'Ulysses' does. Don't mess with it too much.
I had no problem with how the lights went out, streetlights burn out in real life all the time, and sometimes do glow brighter for a second before they go out. I don't think you should tinker with this poem much, other than to find another word to describe the lights to open the poem.
I teared up reading it; it moved me the same way that the last part of Tennyson's 'Ulysses' does. Don't mess with it too much.