04-15-2015, 08:32 AM
I really enjoy this poem, I have come back to it a number of times. The first 3 stanzas are brilliant, there are some strong images in stanzas 2 and 3. I particularly enjoyed 'green dressed in white', this is a wonderful way of writing some of the sights of the party, I presume you are speaking of cannabis? Maybe I'm wrong haha. The last 3 stanzas have less of a hold on me. The refrain seems to be of little use or relevance to them, apart from on the final line - a dig at male overt virility and conformity??? I like the idea that the wolf returns to the party as if nothing has happened, perhaps you could go into what his audience thought? Whether onlookers of brutal actions care at all? Use metaphors and images as well as you did in the first 3 stanzas and I think this will be an excellent poem. I do love the poem, and if you choose to edit it, please post it!