04-12-2015, 03:40 PM
(04-07-2015, 04:43 AM)shy_symphony Wrote: Because I am a woman,I get a feel for the strength of the narrator with this poem. The structure of the poem has a sturdiness that I can feel in the narrator as well. I think my gripe with this poem is that its doing too much telling where it could be showing. For example you write, "I am expected to be an impossible version of myself" where as it might be more poignant to describe something, like a situation or environment, that makes us feel like you are expected to be an impossible version of yourself. Anyway im probably just echoing the other comments, but I think this has potential! Thnx for sharing
I am expected to be an impossible version of myself.
Because I am a woman,
Every lens I look through is distorted to imperfection.
Because I am a woman,
I try to turn every ounce of hate for myself into love for you,
Until I am bone and skin.
Because I am a woman,
I was taught that this is the only way I would get love back.
Because I am a woman,
The only way to be happy is to call for an uprising,
To fight an unholy war until I return to the soil.
Because I am a woman,
My existence is catastrophe.
But because I am a woman,
I am strong enough to survive.

