Heaven Scent
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I like this poem. It's a good start. I would try to focus more clarity into the action of the poem, to get clear in your mind of what is happening and has happened. The calling her his angel thing seems to have been dropped in there and not thoroughly elaborated. It makes me question exactly what you're trying to convey.
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Heaven Scent - by 71degrees - 03-22-2015, 08:27 AM
RE: Heaven Scent - by jkprry - 03-23-2015, 10:25 AM
RE: Heaven Scent - by BW BRINE - 03-24-2015, 01:10 PM
RE: Heaven Scent - by tectak - 03-25-2015, 12:03 AM
RE: Heaven Scent - by TimeOut - 04-04-2015, 08:38 PM
RE: Heaven Scent - by 71degrees - 04-06-2015, 12:48 AM
RE: Heaven Scent - by Jkobrinart - 04-10-2015, 09:55 AM
RE: Heaven Scent - by 71degrees - 04-13-2015, 02:36 AM



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