Why Am I Silent? - title change from Why You are Silent

[tectak]

Hi tectak: Yes, spiritual talk from Gabriel's garden. Talk familiar to many who believe they exist not only in a seen world, but an invisible one; filled with good or bad spirits; that influence life; the bad times referred to as darkness in some form, and light the good. The title is "Why You Are Silent"  because the last line of S2 "Why am I silent": is given theologically as one answer to the question referred to as "God's Silence". "We are never grateful enough".  The first stanza is supposed to represent a frantic crying out for help. Help comes in S2, the clouds of mist are "blessed", in this language, therefore can enlighten. I would have thought the demon's reaped what they stalked.
This is the type of language and images of people who believe strongly that there is an invisible world affecting them. That it is a bad poem I will own up to. I could speak to the issue in concrete terms in a paper, written from an assumption of the existence of an invisible deity; and if so, all the other reasons given for His silence. I would have hoped that S1 being so short and rapid would relay the idea of a frantic call. Can you give me an idea of how to approach the subject of a possible invisible deity to whom people cry out to other than using the typical language of that culture; ie: angels, demons, blessings, light, dark, etc. to make it better. Also, considering that many people are not familiar with this kind of thinking. 
OK, now I know weak knees is also a cliché, even if it does imply something.
Dark shadows can call to temptation, sin or with general destruction.
The last two lines say the same thing because as I mentioned, it was supposed to be a desperate cry; the topic of The Silence of God has been widely discussed. That I do not make a good case, or poem of it is another story. Do you know about the Seventh Seal from Revelations; which has been spoken of as the silence of God. Have you seem Ingmar Bergman's movie, The Seventh Seal?
S2, "Then" supposedly represents a later time. And I spoke to "blessed" clouds enlightening.
S3: Yes, Dark cannot fade! Yes, the idea battered again by darkness, because "we are never grateful enough"; when goodness called; the person was silent; not thankful, did not speak.
Lastly, please keep in mind my lack of education in this field, the ones I wrote away from this site without help;
believe it or not, but I don't lie; got better than average ratings on other sites: which I agree says nothing about
my lack of quality, or that of other sites, BUT, I am trying to incorporate knowledge I am gaining here in new ones I am writing; while here assessing the problems of the older ones, and am very grateful for critique Theoretically, what other approaches could I use.to poetically propose that one reason for God's Silence is a lack of gratitude? Concrete terminology to address the invisible? No need to be sorry. Best Loretta

Loretta...it is the WRONG word.

To reap (verb)
to cut (wheat, rye, etc.) with a sickle or other implement or a machine, as in harvest.
2.
to gather or take (a crop, harvest, etc.).

Origin Expand
before 900; Middle English repen, Old English repan, riopan; cognate with Middle Low German repen to ripple (flax); akin to ripe

Do not use words as if they had whatever meaning you wish them to have. Check the meaning once you have chosen the word and change it if it is wrong...but remember the meaning for next time.I find at least one word a month that I have been using wrongly for years.
Best,
tectak

tectak: thank you for the word correction, and showing me why this poem is dead. Best Loretta

Bring the concept alive by making it your own.
S1 Third person. "You" trip and skip through life as if it was your right. All is well. You do not speak to god...not even to thank him for the great gift bestowed upon you.Why?
S2 First person generic "we". Life takes twists and turns. We suffer tragedies, we lose friends, we become ill. We speak to god and ask for help, strength, succour, peace. He does not answer. Why.
S3 First person "I" . God permits famine, war, plagues, great disasters. It is the will of god. I never question god. Why?

Cut out all the pseudo psycho stuff, all the myth immersed side issues involving obscure religiosity; don't try to impress with half-formed opinion or half-firmed references to obscure wiki wanderings. Write what you know you know, not what you would like the reader to think you know. This is a big site with a lot of intellect sloshing around. We could both drown in it. Stay on your own boat as most of us do. When you see an opportunity coming over the horizon, jump ship if it is close enough...swimming is for fish.
Best,
tectak