04-08-2015, 11:43 AM
(04-07-2015, 04:43 AM)shy_symphony Wrote: Because I am a woman,Agreeing with previous post, metaphors left, right and centre! While, it's poignant on its own, to those (many) who would not understand the situation a woman would be in (undoubtedly the inspiration for writing) then a few strong metaphors would drive the point so much harder. If your message is an arrow, the poem is the bow, and the stronger and clearer you write, the more the bow is pulled back.
I am expected to be an impossible version of myself.
Because I am a woman,
Every lens I look through is distorted to imperfection.
Because I am a woman,
I try to turn every ounce of hate for myself into love for you,
Until I am bone and skin.
Because I am a woman,
I was taught that this is the only way I would get love back.
Because I am a woman,
The only way to be happy is to call for an uprising,
To fight an unholy war until I return to the soil.
Because I am a woman,
My existence is catastrophe.
But because I am a woman,
I am strong enough to survive.
Rather than saying that it feels one way, tell us how and/or why, and what this feeling is like, paint a clear picture of the emotions you are expressing.

