Why Am I Silent? - title change from Why You are Silent

[tectak]

Hi tectak: Yes, spiritual talk from Gabriel's garden. I made that up...don't include it in your explanationTalk familiar to many who believe they exist not only in a seen world, but an invisible one Sez who? Who are these "many"?Are they credible? Are they sane? I have never heard of them, these "many" people who "believe" they exist in an "invisible" world. Surely, that practically defines non-existence? What ARE you referring to? You are.making this up.on the hoof.; filled with good or bad spirits; that influence life; the bad times referred to as darkness in some form, and light the good. The title is "Why You Are Silent"  because the last line of S2 "Why am I silent": is given theologically as one answer to the question referred to as "God's Silence" What IS the question? OK...here's a really good question...I refer you to God's Silence. Ah, well, the answer, theologically of course, is a pink slice of pumpernickel. Wha? is a "We are never grateful enough".  The first stanza is supposed to represent a frantic crying out for help. Help comes in S2, the clouds of mist are "blessed", in this language What language? Ah, you mean gobbledygook...of course...it all makes sense now. Not, therefore can enlighten. Not me I would have thought the demon's reaped what they stalked. See end
This is the type of language and images of people who believe strongly that there is an invisible world affecting them. Who? Who? Is it the same people who believe strongly that we all live on a black-eye pea in the broth of God? Please don't say yes because I just made it up.in That it is a bad poem I will own up to. I could speak to the issue in concrete terms in a paper, written from an assumption of the existence of an invisible deity; and if so, all the other reasons given for His silence. I would have hoped that S1 being so short and rapid would relay the idea of a frantic call. Can you give me an idea of how to approach the subject of a possible invisible deity to whom people cry out to other than using the typical language of that culture; ie: angels, demons, blessings, light, dark, etc. to make it better. Also, considering that many people are not familiar with this kind of thinking.  Thank goodness...or the lunatics would take over the asylum. If you want to write this kind of esoteric mumbo-jumbo read about it in depth before you write about it...it is called psychology....and frankly, and all is opinion, it is 99% garbage BUT 1% stunning enlightenment. Prizes are given for those who can spot that 1%. I cannot.
OK, now I know weak knees is also a cliché, even if it does imply something. Yes. Weak knees
Dark shadows can call to temptation, sin or with general destruction. Sez who? I don't even know what you mean. Give examples...or with general destruction(?)
The last two lines say the same thing because as I mentioned, it was supposed to be a desperate cry; You mean like "Help" followed by "Help". Desperate, yep, desperate. Try to show not tell...your way simply says that to indicate desperation al you need to do is cry helphelphelphelphelp until the required degree of desperation is indicated.the topic of The Silence of God has been widely discussed. Quite That I do not make a good case, or poem of it is another story. Do you know about the Seventh Seal from Revelations; which has been spoken of as the silence of God. Have you seem Ingmar Bergman's movie, The Seventh Seal? yesyesyes...and?
S2, "Then" supposedly represents a later time. And I spoke to "blessed" clouds enlightening. Wot bloody clouds? Who blessed them and why? I have no idea what you are talking about...should I? There is a gap in my education...my ignorance of blessed enlightening clouds is complete. Strangely, I do not feel deprived.
S3: Yes, Dark cannot fade! Yes, the idea battered again by darkness, because "we are never grateful enough"; when goodness called; the person was silent; not thankful, did not speak.
Lastly, please keep in mind my lack of education in this field, the ones I wrote away from this site without help; I had not noticed. Looky loretta, I cannot write an authoratative piece of prose on the rise of Hinduism in Bradford so I don't. There is a lesson here.
believe it or not, but I don't lie; got better than average ratings on other sites: which I agree says nothing about
my lack of quality, or that of other sites, We agree on something BUT, I am trying to incorporate knowledge I am gaining here in new ones I am writing; while here assessing the problems of the older ones, and am very grateful for critique Theoretically, what other approaches could I use.to poetically propose that one reason for God's Silence is a lack of gratitude?  It might be a good idea to consider whether the existence of god depends upon belief in god, or whether god exists even if no one at all believes. Let me know when they let you out. Concrete terminology to address the invisible? No need to be sorry. Best Loretta

Loretta...it is the WRONG word.

To reap (verb)
to cut (wheat, rye, etc.) with a sickle or other implement or a machine, as in harvest.
2.
to gather or take (a crop, harvest, etc.).

Origin Expand
before 900; Middle English repen, Old English repan, riopan; cognate with Middle Low German repen to ripple (flax); akin to ripe

Do not use words as if they had whatever meaning you wish them to have. Check the meaning once you have chosen the word and change it if it is wrong...but remember the meaning for next time.I find at least one word a month that I have been using wrongly for years.
Best,
tectak