Why Am I Silent? - title change from Why You are Silent

[tectak]

Why You Are Silent Again, do you mean to ask a question or give an answer with this title? No answer is given in the poem so I assume it is a lorretaism

Dark shadows call. No. They do not..it is not a characteristic of shadows, even metaphorically. At best they may "appear" as if "calling round" but I do not think you mean that. Even allowing for an opening cliche one could argue that there is an element of "tall mountains" in "dark shadows"
Black curtains fall. This is going to be an elastic metaphor and no mistake...again, loretta, it is not a  new phrase. I just know you can do betta. Give up the rhyming thing. It is not for you...yet
My knees are weak. This is a girly thirties teenage cliche for a response to seeing Clark Gable...yep, it is that old. Inappropriate and fascile
Why don't You speak?
Why are You silent?Why do you say  nothing? Why do you you not respond? Why are you speechless? These last two lines say the same thing...er...which is nothing. Say something outrageous like "Speak, damn You , speak"

Then diamonds dress my destiny. Do not say then. Anything which follows is then. It is a filler. Though like the line its meaning is not linked in any way to the previous stanza except that time passed...so what? A year? a lifetime? A tragedy ago? Perhaps the next line will clarify
Blessed clouds of mist enlighten me. Good grief. What cloud of mist has EVER enlightened anyone? You stretch mataphors way beyond (loretta) Young's Modulus. You cannot expect this to return to its original meaning, whatever it was.
Dark fades to light when angels sing., Stop it. Stop it now. You are in Gabriel's Garden of Gobbledygooks. Dark FADES to light. Nonsense. Leave Angels somebody else's cliche. Awful.
and grace the grand and little things.
Why am I silent? Don't know...make me care. Why is my tongue frozen?

Again, the depth of darkness falls. It is bad enough that it cometh again without being told so
Days wearing black make frequent calls. Nearly nice but isolated. Link, link,link...think,think, think
Dark spirits stalk and reap their prey. Reap is the wrong meaning. When did the demon sow? You do not, cannot reap prey.
A smirking demon creeps my way.
Why are You silent?

Hi loretta,
Sorry to jump in on this. I am not in a good place.
Best,
tectak
I enjoyed the ending of is piece, I'm not fond of the over rhyming in the beginning, but I'm a hypocrite because I use a lot of it in most my pieces.

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