04-06-2015, 07:31 AM
I'm quite fond of the result (even though you kept that damn line 8).
Of course, this is mostly because I liked it pretty much as it was when
you first posted it. Maybe you should just go all the way and name it
"Shelf Life".
ray
P.S. And there it is, the mettlesome heart of PigPen!
"Attempting honesty is a dazzlingly heroic way of revealing you're an idiot,
of exposing all those absurd prejudices you hadn't realized you'd been hiding.
There is no more that can be asked of a critic; or, more importantly, a writer."
- Margaret Atwood
Of course, this is mostly because I liked it pretty much as it was when
you first posted it. Maybe you should just go all the way and name it
"Shelf Life".
ray
P.S. And there it is, the mettlesome heart of PigPen!
"Attempting honesty is a dazzlingly heroic way of revealing you're an idiot,
of exposing all those absurd prejudices you hadn't realized you'd been hiding.
There is no more that can be asked of a critic; or, more importantly, a writer."
- Margaret Atwood
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions