Shelf Life (Edit)

[shemthepenman]

Hello

Expiry Pending - sounds like a sitcom title (but, let's give it a try)

Shelf life is magnificent
You never know who's gonna be next -
But it could be me. - the only interesting thing about this is the phrase 'shelf life', which is itself cliche; remove it and it is just another 'life's a lottery' poem: it could be you! It just sounds like pub philosophy, or even worse Gump philosophy, and Gump worded.

(Which makes me "happy") - out of the blue thought, that probably makes sense in your head, but to anyone else reading it is a non sequitur)


Shelf life is as ominous as ill-lit rooms - Shelf life, in this line sounds like a boyband.
and ancient tombs - why?
With far less walking,
which keeps me talking. - I kinda like these two lines, even though I the first two lines are shite. There is some connection between moving and expression that is interesting.

Shelf life
is finite
and I often dream
of leaving. - oh, it is a suicide emo poem. Or at least that is what the last two lines read like. I cannot stress enough, to anyone pissing and moaning about life, kill your self, kill yourself now... that's why I got sacked from the samaritans


-MR-

Have you ever seen a film called Chungking Express... the shelf life theme in that film is great.