Turritopsis dohrnii

[Brownlie]

So this is an immortal Jellyfish. Imagine that, a Japanese Jellyfish that could lead to sci-fi type organ regeneration. The imperial subconscious may explode in wonder before it could defeat senescence.

Turritopsis dohrnii

jellyfish bloom,- You might want to capitalize jellyfish if you want it to begin a sentence. 
small moons that draw her mind from the shore, --- I guess "that" is sort of clumsy here.
neural stingers shooting blanks, muscle with no memory
(she tries) --- I'm having trouble understanding why these parenthesis are here. Maybe it would be clear to others though.

no electricity, just chemicals
smoothing her beach into glass, -- I can't figure out what her beach is.
wrinkles left for oversize tees and
hospital smocks -- I think there is something compelling in connecting this to old age.

this ocean is a pool -- I suppose you're starting a list of three things the ocean is.
she swirls around,  
a toilet wasting everything, -- I'm not sure if your referring to an actual toilet or calling the ocean a metaphorical toilet. You could represent the toiletness of the sea by including the smell or another detail.  

a child splashing -- I suppose she is the child splashing?

The grammar may be a little off for your purposes. I could be wrong, but I think poems (for the most  part) should try to convey meaning through a proper sentence structure. Of course this poetry and I am, to a degree, looking for something to critique. Also, I don't know much about the speaker. There are some things to infer, such as her age, but it may not be enough. It may also be good to put more physical description of the Jellyfish, which you could of course infuse with metaphor (or not) depending on what you want to do. Idk, at best, I made some observations. Hopefully someone else gives this a look.