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Apple Tears
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04-03-2015, 03:26 PM
This comment might touch on what other people have said, but you're forcing your rhyme...like, alot. It would make more sense if it had some type of meter, or accurate cesura, but it doesn't. I love the idea behind the poem, I do, but I get too distracted that this poem reads like Cat in the Hat.
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Apple Tears - by Hitler - 04-02-2015, 01:44 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by Brownlie - 04-02-2015, 02:44 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by Erthona - 04-02-2015, 10:41 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by ellajam - 04-03-2015, 12:56 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by Hitler - 04-03-2015, 04:23 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by ellajam - 04-03-2015, 04:37 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by Erthona - 04-03-2015, 07:29 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by ellajam - 04-03-2015, 10:35 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by billy - 04-03-2015, 11:51 AM
RE: Apple Tears - by TimeOut - 04-03-2015, 03:26 PM
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