04-01-2015, 08:46 PM
Thanks Erthona and RooktoKing for your detailed feedback. 
Both of you have pointed out some interesting things, and once campnano's over I'll be sure to work on editing this. Particularly clarity, wording, and some images that contradict either the rest of the poem or general reasoning (which is a trap I seem to love falling in to).
Specifics to ask/reply...
Actually, might be neater to do that once I work out how to quote little bits of multiple posts.
Both of you have pointed out some interesting things, and once campnano's over I'll be sure to work on editing this. Particularly clarity, wording, and some images that contradict either the rest of the poem or general reasoning (which is a trap I seem to love falling in to). Specifics to ask/reply...
Actually, might be neater to do that once I work out how to quote little bits of multiple posts.
When it finally snows here, I'll catch a snowflake and put it in the fridge.