04-01-2015, 09:23 AM
there are some great bits of criticism already mentioned here. i'm not as poetry smart as other posters so i'll leave that to them. i had to read this a few times but and i like the end,
"creating what I could think, what I could write, what I could read, and what little I could form, formed me. Not only what I wasn't, but what I wasn't supposed to be. So, desperately, my eyes, like water from the sea, slowly returned to me from far off mountains through tiny streams, and, finally, I can see."
i interpret it that the speaker was liberated by their art, or by art in general, and it helped them find their voice(or eyes). the beginning of the piece could help support the ending more. i was confused by it the first few times i read.
"creating what I could think, what I could write, what I could read, and what little I could form, formed me. Not only what I wasn't, but what I wasn't supposed to be. So, desperately, my eyes, like water from the sea, slowly returned to me from far off mountains through tiny streams, and, finally, I can see."
i interpret it that the speaker was liberated by their art, or by art in general, and it helped them find their voice(or eyes). the beginning of the piece could help support the ending more. i was confused by it the first few times i read.