03-30-2015, 08:55 AM
Hello,
have you ever heard the quote by I don't know who, 'everyone has a book in them, but for most people that is where it should stay.'? Well, everyone has a 'oh I've been fucked over by love' poem in them, and again, that is, for most, where it should stay... but if you do find your hand wandering towards a pen and paper, then maybe it should stay in the draw marked 'never to be read'.
Your 'poem' is obviously for you. There is nothing literary or creative or anything about it anyone wants to read. It is all too clear, and all too clearly boring and obvious.
Some advise, poetry is not about rhyming and line breaks and 'emotions' or love or expressing yourself... it is about reading, work, writing, again and again, failing, and understanding that writing poetry isn't about what you think or feel, it is about writing.
have you ever heard the quote by I don't know who, 'everyone has a book in them, but for most people that is where it should stay.'? Well, everyone has a 'oh I've been fucked over by love' poem in them, and again, that is, for most, where it should stay... but if you do find your hand wandering towards a pen and paper, then maybe it should stay in the draw marked 'never to be read'.
Your 'poem' is obviously for you. There is nothing literary or creative or anything about it anyone wants to read. It is all too clear, and all too clearly boring and obvious.
Some advise, poetry is not about rhyming and line breaks and 'emotions' or love or expressing yourself... it is about reading, work, writing, again and again, failing, and understanding that writing poetry isn't about what you think or feel, it is about writing.