White Cliffs of Dover – for milo
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(03-28-2015, 04:33 AM)Erthona Wrote:  White Cliffs of Dover – for milo
 
While I was resting by the shore,
just me and mine and a few more,
though not exciting, or a bore,
as I don't see the White Cliffs of Dover.
 
It's not surprising I've not been,
here to there and back again,
my family'd think it was a sin,
to waste my gold on White Cliffs of Dover.  
 
It's no surprise I'll never see,
although it's been a dream to me,
to rest out some in the sea,
while taking in the White Cliffs of Dover.
 
 
Erthona
 
Note as per Brownlie, I changed L4 of S1 as follows:

"for I see not the White Cliffs of Dover."

to
"as I don't see the White Cliffs of Dover."
 

©2015
Well, a bit of a bore, this. I tried google, the song lyrics are just as boring and the poem doesn't give me a clue of what impact the cliffs are supposed to have. The rhymes are common, if it's a joke I don't get it, so sorry, this just falls totally flat for me.
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White Cliffs of Dover – for milo - by Erthona - 03-28-2015, 04:33 AM
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