03-30-2015, 01:29 AM
Thank you all for your criticism, I think that my naming it what I did was not entirely done for the purpose of flaunting my intellect. I had reasons more at the time of writing the poem for naming it this, but I don't see the point in sitting around defending it when it simply doesn't seem to work for the audience, for It defeats the purpose of having an audience at all, and so I will change the name of the poem. I just didn't want to name it shelf life, I prefer not to name my poems after something I say in the poems, but maybe I need to get over that as well.
Ellajam, about the dots, I honestly couldn't figure out how to get white spaces to appear. After I clicked the review post button, my white spaces disappeared, so I decided that using dots would be the next best thing, but it was actually supposed to just be white spaces. I'm sort of technologically challenged in that way, can anyone actually tell me how to make the white spaces appear in the final draft? Maybe it only appears when I review the post, and not when I publish it?
Thank you both very much for the critique, I appreciate it, and it made me think about making some revisions.
Ellajam, about the dots, I honestly couldn't figure out how to get white spaces to appear. After I clicked the review post button, my white spaces disappeared, so I decided that using dots would be the next best thing, but it was actually supposed to just be white spaces. I'm sort of technologically challenged in that way, can anyone actually tell me how to make the white spaces appear in the final draft? Maybe it only appears when I review the post, and not when I publish it?
Thank you both very much for the critique, I appreciate it, and it made me think about making some revisions.