03-29-2015, 11:09 PM
As this seems more a poem about existential crisis than about meta-ethics, I'm not sure your title is much more than an attempt to impress people with your intellect, at least that how it appears to me. Regardless, there must be many titles that would better benefit your poem.
I cannot think of L8 "...which keeps me talking." as anything other than an ad hoc rhyme. It does not logically follow from what precedes it, therefore it has nothing to do with the continuity of the line. This is not to say that you do not see a connection, but you have not manifested that connection in what you have written.
As this is in novice, I will refrain from deeper analysis.
Welcome to the site,
Dale
I cannot think of L8 "...which keeps me talking." as anything other than an ad hoc rhyme. It does not logically follow from what precedes it, therefore it has nothing to do with the continuity of the line. This is not to say that you do not see a connection, but you have not manifested that connection in what you have written.
As this is in novice, I will refrain from deeper analysis.
Welcome to the site,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.