Why dove?

[summermoose]

O why dove, why dove, sit alone in your vast fright?
While the blackness swells to swarm on this very night!
Fly dove, fly dove, give the world your shimmering light!
With feathers of white, oh how they glisten so bright! this is where the poem become a bit contrived for me
Please dove, please dove, start before it grips tight!
Pulling us down, with the untold darkest of might!
I cry dove, cry dove, will you not hear my plight?
Your great radiance beside, we could put up a fight!
Rise dove, rise dove, the world you shall incite!
Your illumination beaming, the black will ignite!
Please dove, please dove, smother the darkest blight! most of the lines preceding this seem to speak a similar message, this loses the reader
Raise up and take flight, as a gleaming white knight!
So why dove? Why dove? Why sit alone... in vast fright?

Hi! It seems like you are trying to embed some strong emotion in this poem, but it gets lost with the forced rhyme and the repetition of the same essential meaning throughout many lines. My main feedback would be to become very clear as to what the story/message is you are trying to convey (perhaps you are already) and then understand the way that story will fit into this dove metaphor you are building. Then every line should add something to that story, either some depth, clarity, layers etc. Otherwise it can end up losing the reader and becoming a tad grating.

Good luck!