Heaven Scent

[tectak]

The two of them have been together five years Awkward and unforced enjambment. Unless we are talking about some arbitrary time "have been together" does not need "now". So comma after "...years," then next line.
now, through all the pages of her diary,
Saturdays having been circled in red. Again, unless you are implying a conditionality by using "having" , and I see no such requirement, then it should be "....on all the pages of her diary Saturdays have been circled in red." you cannot red-circle "through all the pages"  but you can "on" them.
Last night, he called her his angel, No commas
but she did not respond. She’s thinking
she might buy chardonnay
for this evening. It is not a moot point nor  do you strive to make it so. It is a wisp  of the muse, a hint of presence, the faintest homeopathic trace of perfume. She, chardonnay and an evening at home. Yes. I buy in to this...have you met my wife?

With the hesitancy of an upcoming spring Awkward and unforced enjambment. Unless we are talking about some meteorological caesura I want my rain to be the sort I get in spring. Spring rain, it is called. Why do it the injustice of perfidious enjambment. It is pointless, stubborn, strangely (for you) inept and obstructive to the flow of that which falleth gently from heaven. Argue and lie.
rain, she raises the bedroom shade
on the morning, sits on the edge
of their unmade bed and paints her toenails;
in the vanity mirror she can see the cloudy sky. Not a crash landing...you cut engines and stalled to a perfect touch down. It is good enough to walk away from. I look forward to flying with you again.

Best,
tectak