03-21-2015, 03:47 PM
a forgetmenot is a flower, forget me not girl; is a cliche used in a famous song and forget me is also a type of poem thats usually cliched. that said i see no reason why a cliche can't be used if a line warrants it's use. this sadly isn't the case. if you think about it forget me not is the same as remember me [which is often used in it's cliched form and made famous by people like christina rossetti; she did a poem called remember and on the the first line are her immortal words.
remember me when i am gone away
Gone far away into the silent yada, yada tada.
learning not to use cliche will usually make you a better writer of poetry, if nothing else, you'll be original. if you were buying a pair of prad shoes, would you prefer original real prada or copies?
the line with road in it; you ask;
How about truth lay, "along the road we'll bleed yes that helps but it only helps the diction. it does nothing to remove the duplicate [road] use lane path or other word for road. or keep it and change the first roads.
remember me when i am gone away
Gone far away into the silent yada, yada tada.
learning not to use cliche will usually make you a better writer of poetry, if nothing else, you'll be original. if you were buying a pair of prad shoes, would you prefer original real prada or copies?
the line with road in it; you ask;
How about truth lay, "along the road we'll bleed yes that helps but it only helps the diction. it does nothing to remove the duplicate [road] use lane path or other word for road. or keep it and change the first roads.