Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1

Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1

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03-21-2015, 05:54 AM

I really like the revision, think you moved in the right direction. I like the addition, it brings that sense of finality that it was missing before, and gives us a glimpse into the N's thoughts, therefore the scene can be continued in the minds of the readers. Nice stuff!

mel.

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Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by Wjames - 03-10-2015, 05:59 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky - by shemthepenman - 03-10-2015, 06:25 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky - by just mercedes - 03-10-2015, 06:57 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky - by Magpie - 03-10-2015, 07:51 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky - by JGmusic512 - 03-10-2015, 09:26 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by Wjames - 03-20-2015, 11:59 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by bena - 03-21-2015, 05:54 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by Wjames - 03-27-2015, 02:48 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by just mercedes - 03-27-2015, 06:06 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by Magpie - 03-27-2015, 08:24 AM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by RooktoKing - 03-31-2015, 02:53 PM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by christophx - 04-01-2015, 12:27 PM

RE: Beneath a Purple Sky edit #1 - by Wjames - 04-03-2015, 06:58 AM

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