03-19-2015, 04:16 AM
I've tried a new edit and find myself facing two problems I face often. The first is not being sure what the main focus of the poem is myself, in this case the boy or reading then vs now. The second problem is when all I've started with is a weak flailing attempt at a metaphor that I haven't worked through, when I edit to give more detail it loses whatever slight poetic value it started with. Up against the wall again, good thing I enjoy this stuff cause I sure am a slow learner. I love the pig pen because better to know you're naked than walk around in the emperor's new clothes. 
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