Reluctant Flower-edit 2 (Erthona, ellajam, Psyche)

[Erthona]

Thanks milo, yes headless. For some reason my dyslexia makes remembering words like that incredibly difficult, but anyway thanks for the corrections. It is important to pass along the correct nomenclature and not be making ones of our own.

Loretta,

The main problem with the poem is that it seems to not say what you wanted it to say, not that it is not a good poem. Maybe instead of just writing over it, you should keep it as is and check on it in a few months. That is not to say to not write a new version more to your liking, but I think this one, even with all the things you would want to eliminate from it has good potential. sometimes we write better than what we intended, because that is how creation happens. Just because you personally disagree with it, do not use that as an excuse to toss it. As a poet, if you wish to grow, you will eventually have to begin to see things from viewpoints other than your own and yes, even develop empathy for those viewpoints. So be kind to the poem, it doesn't deserve evisceration.

Dale