Pendulumly

[Entenzahn]

The beginning is very vague and abstract and that makes the poem as a whole hard to get for me, since I need the first lines to clue me in on what I'm reading. On second glance I understand that this is about a person with mood-swings. The imagery is consistent and you go for some nice similes, but I'm not sure to what end. You're showing me a list of things that are like mood-swings and then you leave saying "that person with mood-swings is me", so I feel like it's mostly a journal entry.

The images are there, but not really impactful and after you've established the theme I wish you'd give me some more immediate impressions that let me feel the highs and lows you're alluding to.

Also I'm pretty sure you're supposed to properly punctuate your poem even when a sentence ends at line end.

Start with the words from heart of the wise very vague and abstract – why start with this? What does it mean?
Sacrifice meaning with excuse-fused lies Phonetically nice but otherwise worse than the first line
Bend with the lows and cheer with the highs Better – I get what you're on about now
Wash out wash in, sure to move with the tides Good image
Circumstance of the moon dictates my mind This line feels odd because the way you'd emphasize the words doesn't gel with the rhythm – Also I get what you're talking about by now
Feeling up this time, but tick tick time flies