03-17-2015, 09:17 PM
(03-17-2015, 03:24 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:Yeah, you're right Paul. We must think of those Sonnet fiends who need 14 lines just to get started.(03-17-2015, 02:00 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote: preparing three linesHaha. Love it. I would suggest that 3 lines in the morning is a manageable habit. Avoid longer forms that inevitably lead to rehab!
his first fix of the morning -
a slave to haiku
Paul
Cheers,
Mark
(03-17-2015, 08:06 AM)just mercedes Wrote: Great drugku! I understand the addiction.Likewise...
Also I think you've come up with a better term with 'Drugku', I obviously wasn't thinking with my 'jun-ku', it sense make don't.
Thanks,
Mark
(03-17-2015, 10:34 AM)billy Wrote: no need for [a] on the last line or his on the 2nd.Thanks Billy,
i like the fun or the thing.
I agree with you about the words that should be dropped and I usually would of but I wanted it to be 5-7-5 to emphasize the attention to detail of the misguided addict, although I appreciate that it is difficult to get that across in the poem. Perhaps if I had put the amount of syllables in each line at the end in brackets???
Thanks for reading,
Mark
wae aye man ye radgie
