Reluctant Flower-edit 2 (Erthona, ellajam, Psyche)

[LorettaYoung]

Hi Ellajam: Yes, child and vine, certainly too long of a stretch; flowers are twice in the same verse and yes, close together, perhaps too close, however I was focused on the subject of flowers. Virgin flowers springtime, early summer. She cried in joy or pain, and saw wonders on the path, also ate some bitter grapes. Not sure about the sentence you think not proper, but will think about it. Exact sentence structure not the highest priority on my list though. Internal wounds pining, looked up the definition and it seemed to fit but I will check it out again. Petals strayed, the flower has petals, very delicate, and I think there's a metaphor here. The initial verse says she was a flower child, who did stray, and a flower has petals. Last line is food for thought; to measure her adventures, or misadventures in terms of choice and life consequences over time.
I think your points very relevant and helpful Ellijam and I will work on them. Thanks so much for taking the time. Best Loretta

PS: pined; verb to languish and weaken,