Seuss Saves the Night (edit 3)

[ellajam]

Good Medicine Stands the Test of Time

Upset by an unplanned
bedtime drop-off, with a sidelong glance
he asks "What percent do you have?
Is it forty?" "Let's see, seventy-two, go ahead."
We consider the choices:
Read to me, read it myself, auto-play.

Out he leaps, my old friend Sam.
"I am Sam, Sam I am."
Five clicks on one spot say Sam, Sam, Sam,
Sam, Sam; ten taps shout Ham Ham Ham,
Ham Ham Ham, Ham, Ham Ham Ham.
Even on retina display, Sam still tries the unknown;
we still grin when he likes it.

In makeshift pajamas fashioned
from drawstring Capris his aunt left behind,
giggles break through sleepover tears.
Thank you, Dr. Seuss.

Darn, still don't know how to write on a post.  You know I'm not great at free form, but I have a few suggestions.

Upset by an unplanned (maybe surprised, sudden,) bedtime drop-off
with a sidelong glance he asks
"What percent do you have"?
"Is it forty"
I would consider combining the last two lines
I think the last a bit awkward? 
I think S 2 does have too many hams, I know it relates to ten, But, how about three taps
I would loose the retina display; can Sam delightfully dive into.......
I think the sleepover tears are endearing,

Just a few timid suggestions, but hope it helps. Best Loretta

Thanks, Loretta, I think your comments will really be helpful towards an edit. Much appreciated.
(I guess no one wants to have ham yelled at them a hundred times, I'm not sure why a five year old finds it so funny )