Reluctant Flower-edit 2 (Erthona, ellajam, Psyche)
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I'm guessing you used some sort of meter on all of the lines because it basically sounds like one giant run on sentence. It's like listening to a song and instead of the notes taking you up and down on an adventure, it's just the same notes every time but with different words. The repetition makes it feel like your building to something, but then it just continues to repeat.
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RE: Reluctant Flower - by first_high_of_the_day - 03-17-2015, 01:58 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by LorettaYoung - 03-17-2015, 02:40 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by ellajam - 03-17-2015, 07:46 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by LorettaYoung - 03-17-2015, 08:32 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by Erthona - 03-18-2015, 12:08 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by LorettaYoung - 03-18-2015, 04:20 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by Erthona - 03-18-2015, 05:40 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by milo - 03-18-2015, 06:06 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by billy - 03-18-2015, 03:16 PM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by LorettaYoung - 03-18-2015, 11:25 PM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by Erthona - 03-19-2015, 03:51 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by Erthona - 03-29-2015, 05:06 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by LorettaYoung - 03-29-2015, 08:02 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by ellajam - 03-29-2015, 08:20 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by LorettaYoung - 03-29-2015, 08:42 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by Psyche - 03-29-2015, 11:44 AM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by LorettaYoung - 03-29-2015, 09:49 PM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by Erthona - 03-29-2015, 09:56 PM
RE: Reluctant Flower - by LorettaYoung - 03-29-2015, 10:18 PM



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