3-12-15 'Ku

[Leah S.]

this year
we tap the maples
late

Haikus need a 'haiku moment.' I never tinker with other people's haikus, but I think you need more of a moment. Thoughts:
1) if it's too late in the year the sap does not run as well, and isn't as sweet.
2) Making maple syrup and sugar is hard work and usually shared in the community, if it's not a commercial enterprise. Is there a metaphor?
3) If "late" is meant to be ambiguous or have a double meaning, you'll have to go back and clearly establish a metaphor.
4) If there is no metaphor, then you need to put us (the readers) unequivocally in "the moment." We need to actually experience something.