Filling the Pussy

[Leah S.]

Filling the Pussy

There is a wonky headed cat that's stood Maybe it's American grammar, but I think "that's stood" stands for "that has stood", which means there should be a clause telling us how long it's stood there, or what else it's been doing while standing there. I know it's finicky, but it bugs me.
behind my puter screen, just to the right I agree with 'puter, but either way, you're forcing the meter. The sentence needs a period at the end.
It's laden down with coins; not bollywood I have no clue what a "bollywooden nickel" might be, and if your enjambment is going to amputate a word, then I say you should stitch up the wound with a hyphen.
en nickels or, lead pennies dullish bright Period.

A five or single peso piece I pop
into a slot within it's arching back, I know 'it's' is correct as the possessive, but it still looks wrong.That is because it's wrong. "It's" is foreshortened "it is". The possessive is "its". Sorry from a pedantic prat...or is it pratt?
above a plastic-belly buttoned stop It should be "plastic-belly-buttoned" or "plastic belly-buttoned." Or just take that hyphen right out of there and use it for bollywood-en.
that's nestled near a de-glazed hairline crack.

So far I haven't saved enough to buy
a house, a car, a bike or pair of shoes; I wish for a third comma after 'bike.'
It hurts to let my sleeping coinage lie.
I'd much prefer a prostitute or booze.
Some days I turn my pockets inside out
then counting up the change I sing the blues. Why the blues? So far you are vamping.

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i'm still not sure about the fem rule, as it is i have a line with 5 and a half foot ending with a fem followed by a 4 and a 1/2 foot line beginning with a stress. the cat is actually on the right of my table but who cares changed bollywooden to
''''''bollywood
en nickles
after leanne pointed out the cocked up rhyme.

I like this poem, it's well on the way to being witty. Carry on. Leah