03-17-2015, 12:15 AM
Your point is made clear. In stanza one L 4-5, especially line 4 is distracting and awkward, I think this is a good beginning and I would take Leanne's advice about working on quatrains. Loretta
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RE: Asking a girl to dance - by LorettaYoung - 03-17-2015, 12:15 AM
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