03-16-2015, 11:44 PM
(03-13-2015, 10:18 PM)10BIT Wrote: Confusion, delusion, intrusionI suppose the first line of 3 rhymes are supposed to create drama; but "confusion" here is my dominant thought.
a shatterd... crystalline pearl
hazy shining, glimmer crazy!
mind in pieces... truly pure
_________and white as snow.
Fiery heavens burn my skin
A wolf in disguise_________
____________ O am I keen!
A shimmering diamond,
___________I am devils kin.
I have no idea what you are trying to say here; as many terms contradict each other: "hazy" but "shining", what is the thought behine "glimmer crazy". The "mind is in pieces" but "truly pure" doesn't make sense to me, and I don't see how the lines relate to each other: "Fiery heavens burn my skin", relates to "A wolf in disguise" how. I do see how you are trying to be innovative here. Loretta