Filling the Pussy

[fromcancertocapricorn]

Filling the Pussy

There is a wonky headed cat that's stood
behind my puter screen, just to the right
It's laden down with coins; not bollywood
en nickels or, lead pennies dullish bright

A five or single peso piece I pop
into a slot within it's arching back,
above a plastic-belly buttoned stop
that's nestled near a de-glazed hairline crack.

So far I haven't saved enough to buy
a house, a car, a bike or pair of shoes;
It hurts to let my sleeping coinage lie.
I'd much prefer a prostitute or booze.
Some days I turn my pockets inside out
then counting up the change I sing the blues.

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i'm still not sure about the fem rule, as it is i have a line with 5 and a half foot ending with a fem followed by a 4 and a 1/2 foot line beginning with a stress. the cat is actually on the right of my table but who cares changed bollywooden to
''''''bollywood
en nickles
after leanne pointed out the cocked up rhyme.

As it seems meter and rhyme have been thoroughly covered by some other members, I wanted to address some of the diction problems in this poem. First, "puter" seems out of place, given the rest of the poem does not rely on vernacular. Side-note, I believe "it's" should be "its." The addition of the bike to your list seems repetitive, you already have (or can't pay for) a mode of transportation. I would substitute something more useful to the poem. In all honesty though, there's just something incredibly annoying about this poem that I can't quite pin down. It's like it's pretentious in a non-pretentious way. Maybe it's just my aversion to poems with rhyme and meter. Also, the title is out of place in the poem. You can't title a poem that uses the words "laden" and "dullish bright" Filling the Pussy. I get the joke, but it's out of place with the rest of the poem.