03-15-2015, 07:34 PM
To make that rhyme work you'd have to have 'stood-en/bollywood-en'... or alternatively, just 'bollywood' then start the next line with '-en' and be a proper rebel 
Otherwise, it all scans pretty well and I really like that sestet. Not super sure about 'dullish bright', although it's not a bad description and I get where you're coming from -- but some pedant's going to come along and tell you off about it, I'll bet! (I would never...)
Otherwise, it all scans pretty well and I really like that sestet. Not super sure about 'dullish bright', although it's not a bad description and I get where you're coming from -- but some pedant's going to come along and tell you off about it, I'll bet! (I would never...)
It could be worse