03-14-2015, 02:43 AM
The last line conveyed to me that the speaker had not yet figured it out and was up for another round of talking about it, not realizing that it would not effect any change in himself or his worldview. The repetition implied this was said sarcastically, which would seem to be in opposition to the description that has been stated for the speaker, so I can only assume it is imposed by the writer to acknowledge that he does not view the speaker with complete seriousness. In general I am opposed to repetition as it is so...well... repetitious. In this case however, it adequately describes the derision of the writer, if this is his actual intent. This is how I initially perceived it or otherwise I would have said something about the repetition. I find it a clever use of breaking the forth wall.
Something to consider. Oftentimes we unconsciously impose upon a poem certain aspects such as a rhythmic quality that is not there (I have been guilty of this many times myself). I am not saying you should take what I said as the be all, but I would suggest not discarding such things out of hand in favor of your own reading, as you like all writers, will tend to have a bias towards their own work. One final thing (I promise). Just because this is poetry, one is not relieved of the need to follow the same rules that any other form of writing must follow. One must learn to make a poem more rhythmically appealing within that structure, not use it as a reason to ignore the rules of grammar and punctuation.
Best,
Dale
Something to consider. Oftentimes we unconsciously impose upon a poem certain aspects such as a rhythmic quality that is not there (I have been guilty of this many times myself). I am not saying you should take what I said as the be all, but I would suggest not discarding such things out of hand in favor of your own reading, as you like all writers, will tend to have a bias towards their own work. One final thing (I promise). Just because this is poetry, one is not relieved of the need to follow the same rules that any other form of writing must follow. One must learn to make a poem more rhythmically appealing within that structure, not use it as a reason to ignore the rules of grammar and punctuation.
Best,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.

