A poem for a demon

[first_high_of_the_day]

I really liked how you built the poem into a fast tempo at the beginning, but felt it lost all momentum when you hit this line:

"mind in pieces... truly pure"

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The following:

"fiery heavens"
"a wolf in disguise"
"a shimmering diamond"

are all overused and archaic phrases that could easily be replaced by your own original imagery.