A poem for a demon

[shemthepenman]

hello,

To say that I think I am missing something would be an understatement. I probably am, but unfortunately I have the suspicion that what I am missing will not greatly increase my enjoyment of this poem. But I have only read it the once, and this will be my second. So a crit in real time

Confusion, delusion, intrusion - this could quite possibly be the worst opening to anything that has ever had an opening (including Arbeit macht frei). It is so obviously terrible that it would be improper for me to elaberate. There should be some kind of punctuation mark at the end.
a shatterd... crystalline pearl - what't the elipse for? how does this line relate to the previous line?
hazy shining, glimmer crazy! - 'hazy' and 'shining' pretty much the definition of 'glimmer'. Is this about make-up?
mind in pieces... truly pure - elipses again, for why? Anyway, aha, this is your mind? But it is still about cosmetics, right? Mind in pieces is cliche.
_________and white as snow. - am I supposed to write it, too? 'white as snow' is cliche as is 'pure as snow'.
Fiery heavens burn my skin - Fiery heavens is not cliche, but it doesn't subvert the cliche enough to justify it. Suntan lotion?
A wolf in disguise_________ - Cliche. And another fill in the blanks, for god knows what reason.
____________ O am I keen! - :/
A shimmering diamond, - shimmering, shining, hazy, glimmering... diamonds, crystals and peals... this is about Boots isn't it!?
___________I am devils kin. - blanks. I filled them in with expleatives. It actually improved it.

My critique is a little flippant, but come on, what  did you expect. It is as vacuous as its 'fill in the blank' lines.