An Old Book

[Ryan_Toscano204]

I love the idea of comparing a person to an old book. You don't say that the person in the poem doesn't like it. Just that he's kind of bored of it. He's seen the same thing too many times in it. That being said I don't see why you shouldn't push it even further. Short poems are great, I just feel there's more here. You have the idea of the dust settling on the book. It gave me vibes of people settling in a marriage or a relationship. You can go someplace a little dark and discuss an aspect of cheating. If a relationship is what you're trying to push that is. And talk about the idea of experiencing new books while you still have your old favorite sitting there collecting dust. Even if you don't use that metaphor or something similar; I think it would be a good idea to make your poem a bit more clear with what you're talking about. I feel like I gathered enough from the poem to realize that it was about a worn out relationship. But if you were going for something else than restructure the poem, and add some length to it to make your subject more clear.

Please try to give the person something more than what you interpret the poem to mean and generalities.

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