03-10-2015, 04:14 PM
hi samename.
it reads like an extended cliche. as jmusic points out, there's a lot of universal sentiments in play and they also stop the poem being original. in fact i can only reiterate all jmusic said. a suggestion is to use some connective tissue along with as much originality as you can muster.
it reads like an extended cliche. as jmusic points out, there's a lot of universal sentiments in play and they also stop the poem being original. in fact i can only reiterate all jmusic said. a suggestion is to use some connective tissue along with as much originality as you can muster.