03-10-2015, 07:47 AM
Nice work.
Small piece of feedback would be to either use the definite article "the" before your nouns consistently, or not use them. For me the variation between the lines doesn't flow as well as it could.
for example you use: "Children running, playing with the pygmy bear" and then use "The firemen turn their hoses on the salesmen trying to sell"
nice work overall!
Small piece of feedback would be to either use the definite article "the" before your nouns consistently, or not use them. For me the variation between the lines doesn't flow as well as it could.
for example you use: "Children running, playing with the pygmy bear" and then use "The firemen turn their hoses on the salesmen trying to sell"
nice work overall!