Osprey

[Deadrise]

Hello Toxic,

This feels like it is lamentation of winter or maybe fall (that's just the vibe it gives me...)

Here in VA the first Osprey sight (usually in early March) marks the end of winters grip and is a most accurate predictor of warmer weather. I feel reborn and even emotional when I see the first one. I usually hear the peep, peep peep for a day or two before I finally see one.

Soon they will be grabbing sticks out of the yard and flying through the trees snatching dead branches for their nests. Before long their great nests will be filled with bobble headed chicks and their parents will be busy feeding and protecting them. Its amazing to watch the parents sortie out to repel marauding Eagles, the aerial dogfights are breathtaking especially when the eagles invert in flight to bring their talons into play.

As Fall draws near their numbers slowly decline until one day you realize that you haven't heard or seen one in a few days and then you realize they wont be back until Spring, an equally emotional experience. (I miss them and I am not much of a fan of winter)

Today is the first day in three weeks that the creek hasn't been frozen over.....I could be any day now  


Due to my super novice statue, I think the only advice I am qualified to give you is to keep clarity in mind.
I really enjoy the progression of nouns in the second line, but the comma's and the degree ofseparation of ideas creates a lack of cohesion in my opinion.
Please, take this with a grain of salt. Great feedback thank you.

Take care,
John