03-07-2015, 06:05 AM
(03-05-2015, 05:20 AM)Leanne Wrote: I really enjoyed this, Keith. You have a multitude of very vivid images in quick succession that paint a clear and unpleasant picture, which is wrapped up with the extreme irony and hypocrisy dripping from the final stanza. The punctuation could do with a going-over, but that's all I've got.Thanks for the feedback Leanne, yes a cynical poke at bad parenting, glad you picked out the irony. Best keith
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