file under L for Lost
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Lovely

(03-06-2015, 05:13 AM)just mercedes Wrote:  malfunctioning lights
whine and flicker
off once-white tiles

a drop of blood
falls from your nostril
in slow motion, exploding
 
small puffs of powder
from the off-white line

on the cistern To me, a cistern is a water-tank, usually large and outdoors. Since you had already put me in a sleazy public bathroom, I had to assume it was a sink, but it really halted the flow.
 
heavy gravity
in the v of dive;
it’s happy hour
Can't think of anything else. Really like the last three lines. Carry on. Leah
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Messages In This Thread
file under L for Lost - by just mercedes - 03-06-2015, 05:13 AM
RE: file under L for Lost - by Leah S. - 03-07-2015, 12:55 AM
RE: file under L for Lost - by just mercedes - 03-07-2015, 04:08 AM
RE: file under L for Lost - by Magpie - 03-08-2015, 01:23 AM
RE: file under L for Lost - by just mercedes - 03-08-2015, 02:50 PM
RE: file under L for Lost - by just mercedes - 03-08-2015, 03:45 PM
RE: file under L for Lost - by tectak - 03-08-2015, 05:35 PM
RE: file under L for Lost - by just mercedes - 03-09-2015, 04:39 AM
RE: file under L for Lost - by crow - 03-11-2015, 06:06 PM
RE: file under L for Lost - by crow - 03-12-2015, 12:28 AM
RE: file under L for Lost - by just mercedes - 03-12-2015, 04:05 AM
RE: file under L for Lost - by lacan123 - 03-12-2015, 12:01 PM
RE: file under L for Lost - by Leah S. - 03-16-2015, 06:09 AM



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