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Sitting on my chest
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03-05-2015, 05:20 AM
I really enjoyed this, Keith. You have a multitude of very vivid images in quick succession that paint a clear and unpleasant picture, which is wrapped up with the extreme irony and hypocrisy dripping from the final stanza. The punctuation could do with a going-over, but that's all I've got.
It could be worse
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Sitting on my chest - by Keith - 03-05-2015, 04:53 AM
RE: Sitting on my chest - by Leanne - 03-05-2015, 05:20 AM
RE: Sitting on my chest - by Keith - 03-07-2015, 06:05 AM
RE: Sitting on my chest - by 71degrees - 03-25-2015, 11:52 AM
RE: Sitting on my chest - by Erthona - 03-28-2015, 08:02 AM
RE: Sitting on my chest - by jkprry - 03-29-2015, 10:40 AM
RE: Sitting on my chest - by Keith - 06-28-2015, 09:05 AM
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